User:Smlavering/Carolina Maria de Jesus/Wellsl4 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Smlavering


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Smlavering/Carolina_Maria_de_Jesus?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lots of good content to work with. I think you have a good timeline and events to talk about. I think something to work on would be transitions and making the article a little more readable. Try to avoid absolutes (i.e. her only option, stay objective). The goal for the tone is stay objective. Great citations.