User:Snazzyricotta/Ottoman illumination/Bumblebeatrice Peer Review

General info
Snazzyricotta
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Snazzyricotta/Ottoman illumination
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Ottoman illumination

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall this is a very well edited piece! It was very difficult to tell where the parts you edited were, but I appreciated your adding new headings to the article to better organize the piece. All of your claims were followed by a citation which was very good and the information provided was conveyed very neutrally and unbiased. The lead is well written, however I wonder if you could make it more concise as it is a little long for an introduction. Also, in terms of the organization, perhaps it may be helpful to add subsections under history and maybe break it up into different years. However, other than those small critiques this is a very well researched and composed article. This is really impressive!!