User:Snazzysugarplum/Violence and intersectionality/JamBing Peer Review

General info
Snazzysugarplum
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Snazzysugarplum/Violence and intersectionality
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Violence and intersectionality

Evaluate the drafted changes
Good luck with your reference page! So sorry that it's having issues :(

Your plans sound good - the "current statistics" section definitely could use some updates.

I like the cuts and word choice changes suggested. I think the clarifications you made will improve reader comprehension and improve the neutrality of the article. Your terminology choices are more neutral than what was there previously. I also think the sources you've added are great for adding credibility, especially where not many were cited previously.