User:Snowdrop1995/Varlen Pen/Poppyprint Peer Review

Mina, you have done such a wonderful job here! My comments are mostly minor copyedits and suggestions on a couple of words / phrases.

Chong Gwanchol (1916-1983), a colleague of Pen's at the Pyongyang College of Arts, claimed

-> According to Chong Gwanchol...to sound more neutral? "claimed" sounds a little bit like Chong was trying to make a point.

western -> Western

imaginary scenery, -> "imaginary" could be confusing here since Mt Geumgang does exist (take it out of quotation mark?). I am assuming that you mean he is painting from memory or based on other photographs or images.

Mount Kumgang (Wiki page that you can link!)

March 3rd to May 8th, 2016. -> March 3 to May 8, 2016. When you need to use "th" don't use superscript.

artist's contribution t'''o the artworld. -> art world, and you could be a bit more specific here...Korean art history?'''

'''other’s -> others. Do not use apostrophe for plural, an "s" is enough.'''

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