User:Snowdrop1995/Varlen Pen/Zeezee7 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Snowdrop1995)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Snowdrop1995/Varlen_Pen?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Varlen Pen

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
The lead looks good and it seems you added a sentence about his career by the end of paragraph. If you add more description of what the article is about and its major sections, like his exhibition and death, it would look more complete. Overall, the lead is pretty concise and has a good introduction.

Content
The content is relevant to the topic and is added up to date. However, the content of the paintings and his artwork are missing which can be a separate section in the article.

Tone and Balance
The content is pretty neutral and does not have claims that are heavily biased toward the artist.

Sources and References

I checked the sources and they seem reliable information and have accurate reflection of what is cited. However, they can be more used and expanded in the article. For example, source number 4 “Korean Art in the Historiography of Multiple Modernisms can be used more as well as source 8 “Moon Young-dai, Recipient for Culture”

Organization
The content is well written and has great vocabulary but it was not an easy read for me; I think at this point it is my problem as the English language is not my first language.

Overall, the content is well organized and the section that already has is clear and reflects on the major points.

Images and Media
The article does not have any images.

Overall impressions
This information that is added can be expanded and seem more complete if you had a separate section about his paintings and artwork. If you add pics of his artwork, even himself, would be helpful as well. In general, this article is based on a good amount of information and looks great for a draft.