User:SoYouNeedAUsername/Hikaru Genji/Slaughter3 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SoYouNeedAUsername


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 * Creating User:SoYouNeedAUsername/Hikaru Genji - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hikaru Genji - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead is overly detailed and could be broken up into different sections. The lead does a good job of describing the character, but I believe it is overly detailed for a lead section. The article could be broken up into different sections, like "meaning of Hikaru Genji's name" or "inspirations for the character" and could have some of the information from the lead moved into these sections. I think that the content is up-to-date and relevant to the topic. My only suggestion would be to possibly add more information about how the author was inspired to create the character, although I am unsure if this is necessary for the article. The article as a whole deals with Wikipedia's equity gap, as it relates to Japanese culture, which may be a historically underrepresented population. The article has a neutral tone and does not attempt to persuade readers of a particular point of view; It simply informs readers about the character Hikaru Genji. The only source used has a working link. The article needs more sources as it only uses one. When I click on "View history" I am unable to see what user SoYouNeedAUsername has added, and the most recent edits are from Citation Bot on 9/30/22 as well as an edit on 9/21/22 from Levivich, all other edits are from 2021 and earlier. I recommend adding an image of Hikaru Genji at the beginning of the article, in the lead section. There is currently one image in the article, and it is of the author of the character. The article seems pretty good overall, but I suggest adding more information to make it more informative to readers, as well as including an image of Hikaru at the beginning of the article. Overall, it is a good article though!