User:SoccerTB/Beta Fish/SoccerTB Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mmaley2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mmaley2/Betta


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Betta

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Great start in the sandbox! I like how you added more detail in your lead to help support information throughout the article. It gives great detail about what to look for in the article. It adds new detail, not wordy, and great use of a supporting article to help give more information to this article. The content that you added is not bias, viewpoints are greatly neutral, and doesn't heavily persuade people to think betta fish are the best but simply giving good information about the background of bettas. I think while talking about bettas being pets in your introduction you can move it to the subheading "Bettas as pets" to give more detail in that category, while explaining more on why male bettas need to be kept separate. I would help expain where you got your new information from like an article, an academic journal, etc.