User:Sodonn12/Illinois Sports Gambling Law/Pbutle11 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sodonn12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sodonn12/Illinois_Sports_Gambling_Law?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/a.

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

·        The lead could use a broad introductory sentence.

·        It may be a little too detailed about the recent developments – perhaps some details could be added to a dedicated section below it.

Content

·        All content is relevant to the topic.

·        All content is up to date – very important with this topic as it covers relatively new legislation and licenses being issued as recently as this year.

·        The “Early Sports Betting in Illinois” section appears to be started but could use some more information. There are headings for more topics, but no content has been added. The article is borderline if it could stand on its own as is, but given that no content doesn’t belong, it should suffice as its own brief article.

·        The article does not deal with one of Wikipedia’s equity gaps.

Tone and Balance

·        The content appears natural. It describes legislative processes without any obvious bias or support given to any side.

·        No claims appear heavily biased.

·        No single viewpoint is overrepresented nor underrepresented.

·        There is no intent to persuade readers of any particular viewpoint.

Sources and References

·        One citation is to a publicly available Illinois court decision and another to a statute – a primary source – though this is appropriate in this instance. All others are to worthy secondary sources.

·        All of the references accurately pull information and do not distort any statements.

·        They all appear thorough and current. There are three citations to the Chicago Tribune – which given the local nature of the topic doesn’t seem to be too limiting. News sources – while not great legal sources – are okay for Wikipedia – especially when the topic is so current.

·        The once source that seems perhaps a little sketchy is the “Encyclopedia of Chicago” – but it has an author, bibliography, and a .org address – so for wiki purposes this suffices.

Organization

·        The organization seems logical – especially with the currently empty headings – it all makes sense.

·        There are no grammatical or spelling errors.

·        The first two paragraphs, if intended to be a lead, could be shorter. Some of this more specific content could probably fall under an existing or current heading.

Images and Media

·        There are no images nor media.

For New Articles

·        As a new article, I’m not sure it’s notable enough per Wiki’s Notability standards. If there is a “Sports Gambling in the United States” page, this may be better suited for that.

·        At the moment it doesn’t link to any other articles, but there are many it could be linked to, so not a problem at this stage.

Overall Impressions

·        Overall, this is a great article. It introduces the reader to the topic and utilizes the 6 sources needed for this assignment. With some of the small tweaks described it will be good to publish. It will need some fleshing out under the other headings to be a new standalone article, but it is a great start.

·        There are no obvious shortcomings. All the sources are great – research is excellent.

·        The biggest highlight is that it addresses recent developments in a very thorough way, citing to different reliable secondary sources.

·        Great job!