User:Softstarkid/Akatek language/Ivanatheslayer Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Softstarkid, Mmysli, Dquin3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Softstarkid/Akatek_language?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Akatek language

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has a substantial amount of information regarding the relation Akatek has to other languages and how Akatek is derived from them. It has enough information regarding the regions it can be found in and the people who speak it, but I believe it can be expanded. For example, it might be important to see how prevalent it is amongst age ranges and if there's a concerted effort to increase the use of the language, or if the numbers are decreasing. The Lead kind of switches the subject of Akatek history and demographics to discuss an interesting aspect of the language grammar, but I believe this would be more effective in a different place, such as a separate section (i.e., a heading named Grammar) where you can place the first piece of information from the sandbox in it.

Because the part about phonology in the sandbox deals with, in part Q'anjob'al, it would maybe be most effective in the third paragraph of the lead because it offers a more specific distinction from Q'anjob'al that could give more context.