User:Softstarkid/Akatek language/Jlia22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Softstarkid, Mmysli, Dquin3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Softstarkid/Akatek_language?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Akatek language

Evaluate the drafted changes
I would say that the part of the article that has the largest room for improvement, aside from adding more content, is the lead section. I would suggest relocating some parts of the lead to their own sections. The second paragraph talking about branching language families is a little wordy, and could be simplified while leaving some of that information there. If desired, you could rewrite in more detail in a separate section. Moreover, I think that the 3rd paragraph would be a good start for a small History section outside of the lead, while perhaps leaving the sentence about being considered a dialect until the 1970s. Finally with the lead, I feel that the last paragraph is far to detailed to be a part of the lead, and would be better put in some section involving grammar; maybe morphology? After you read more about the grammar, perhaps you could briefly and broadly write more about the language's grammar in the lead. Overall I would say that once more content is added it might become easier to create a concise lead.