User:Sognjm/Naheda Sahtout/Allyssa.b Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sognjm


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Naheda Sahtout


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead is concise and includes relevant information that sets up the article very well. It includes an introductory sentence that describes the articles topics. You do not have any information in your lead that is not in the rest of the article which is good.

Content

All of the content being discussed is up to date and relevant to the article overall. This article does a good job at highlighting the difficulties this individual faced and at highlighting her as an uncommon leader. This article does deal with an equity gap as this individual is a disabled person and the article discussed the difficulties she faced because of that. It also highlights how this individual advocated for others and the work that she does.

Tone and Balance

This article has a very neutral tone and does not attempt to persuade the reader one way or the other. All of the claims that are made are backed with facts and do not come from a biased point of view.

Sources and References

All of the sources that are used are reliable credible sources. There is a fairly large range of sources and they are all current and thorough. All of the links appear to work as well and are all fairly current as well.

Organization

The information is presented in a clear and well organized manner. The section in a good order that allows the article to flow well. Under medical career and advocacy your second sentence has the word "the" repeated twice so you may want to remove that. Under your research and career section you seem to have a few grammatical errors. In your fourth sentence beginning with :Dahout has been a" you say " instructor at eh the University..." but I believe the "eh" should be removed. In that same sentence, you have capitalized at when you say "instructor At the University..." and it should not be capitalized. In that same section your last sentence before you begin the disability section you say "Additionally, has been a..." but you should put "she" before the has so it says "Additionally, she has been a..". Under your disability section in your second sentence you say "She has been turned away from labs for her disability make her unfit in the eyes..." but you should change make to making so it says "She has been turned away from labs for her disability making her unfit in the eyes..." In your section sentence under your disability section you said "...and founds ways to...: but you should say found instead of founds. In that same seated you say "but it her experience.." but you should say in instead of it. Additionally, I would maybe consider rewriting the sentence a bit to better explain what the driving force for her advocacy was.

Images and Media

The image appears to be cited correctly and is a clear image that allows for a better understanding of the topic. The image is laid out in a visually appealing way. You could consider adding another image of one of the universities she attended or possibly of the Canadian Food Inspection Agency where she works if you are able to find one.

New Articles

The article has at least two sources that are independent of the subject and the sources seem to be an exhaustive list of the information on this individual. The article does follow the format of other articles as it has a heading, infobox, as well as other similar features. There are many links to other wiki pages.

Overall Impressions

This is a very strong article that does a great job at highlighting the uncommon leader being discussed! Just make sure you fix the grammar mistakes I highlighted above! Great work!