User:SoloMunn/Sikhism in the United States/Bootlegcleopatra Peer Review

The article currently considers the main ideas to know about Sikhism in the United States. It clearly presents the population and their experience with the American government and society. The article even includes the common misconceptions about the group. You have a great plan for editing this page. I especially believe that it is necessary to include the discrimination that Sikhs faced before the 9/11 terrorist attack, rather than merely after. I would suggest monitoring the immigration patterns. I see that there is information about immigration under the "History" section. Though, outlining the immigration patterns of Sikhs can tell the reader about their push and pull factors, their goals, and the other factors that contribute to immigration patters. The most important thing to fix in this article is its structure. It needs a clearer flow, as there are currently random subheadings with no body text. Overall, reading this article allowed me to gain big-picture perspective because I am reviewing Sikhism in the US military. I now know more about Sikhs and their position in America, specifically their small population and communities.

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