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Chronic Lymphocytic Leukemia
CLL is bad.

Practice Editing Here (Nov 15th in-class Wiki session work)

 * This is a place to practice clicking the "edit" button and practice adding references (via the citation button).

Task:


 * 1) Find a peer-reviewed journal article on PubMed. Practice inserting your citation in the above space using the "cite" tool
 * 2) Choose one "B-level" medical article on Wikipedia from the following list: https://wp1.openzim.org/#/project/Medicine/articles?quality=B-Class&importance=High-Class
 * 3) Practice editing live on Wikipedia by finding a typo in the text or improving the clarity/readability of a sentence by adjusting a few words in a sentence.

Assignment # 3- please post an anonymous copy here!
1.      Proposed Changes

Original: Risk factors include having a family history of the disease. Exposure to Agent Orange and certain insecticides might also be a risk.

Changed to: Risk factors include having a family history of the disease, with 10% of those who develop CLL have a family history of the disease. Exposure to Agent Orange, certain insecticides, reduced   recreational sun exposure, exposure to hepatitis C virus, and common infections are also considered risk factors.

2.     Rationale for Proposed Changes

The rationale behind the proposed change is that the current sentences do not provide a comprehensive understanding of risk factors involved in CLL. However, with the change in the first sentence, it is understood how serious of a risk factor family history is as it provides a quantitative value. Additionally, with the change of the second sentence, more important risk factors associated with CLL are highlighted.

Source: Hallek, M., Shanafelt, T. D., & Eichhorst, B. (2018). Chronic lymphocytic leukaemia. Lancet (London, England), 391(10129), 1524–1537. https://doi.org/10.1016/S0140-6736(18)30422-7

3.     Area of Controversy

There is no area of controversy and/or ambiguity in regards to the proposed change. These risk factors seem to be well-established in the field.

4.     Critique of Source

The source is a review article, however it is not a systematic review. Firstly, this could be a bias in the method selection of the articles. While systematic reviews have a rigorous, clear selection approach with multiple assessors and often a third party (in case of a conflict), review articles tend to lack this quality. Therefore, this can lead to selection bias. Additionally, the authors mentioned the articles they had selected were exclusively from PubMed. This can further lead to publication bias as they did not search through unpublished articles and grey literature. However, this has not impacted the information I have chosen to share as the article is from a reputed journal (with high impact factor) and uses high-quality, recent articles for reference.

5.     Article Improvement

Hello, we are a group of medical students editing this page as part of our class assignment. We have compiled a list of suggestions to improve this article and would appreciate community feedback before we proceed with these edits. Here is a list of our suggestions:

Thank you.
 * 1) Revise the wording of the first sentence of the second paragraph to: Risk factors include having a family history of the disease, with 10% of those who develop CLL have a family history of the disease.
 * 2) Revise the wording of the second sentence of the second paragraph to: Exposure to Agent Orange, certain insecticides, reduced recreational sun exposure, exposure to hepatitis C virus, and common infections are also considered risk factors.

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page (part of assignment 3)

 * This will also be covered on Nov 15th in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2021/Talk Page Template