User:Sophia-zaragoza/Language and gender/Suz.CSUF Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sophia-zaragoza


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sophia-zaragoza/Language and gender
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Language and gender

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your lead paragraph should address information that explains how language and gender intersect. If you would like to mention a peer reviewed article you should include information the article presents. If your other information is based on this peer reviewed article mentioned in the beginning, make sure that you have a link to that article with each piece of information that was based on that article. The last sentence in your first paragraph is irrelevant is it does not help the reader to understand language and gender. It will be up to the editors to trust your sources so there may be no need to mention that sentence. I like how you formulated your second paragraph! In the third paragraph please explain what you mean by "males use male protagonist". If the sentence "Feminism is also a strong factor in gender and language" is added, it should be supported with ideas from peer reviewed articles. In the fourth body paragraph I would introduce the idea of the "default male" as a way to describe this trend. I believe it should be mentioned in the article you are referring to. In the fourth paragraph it also consists of many examples but there should be ideas from peer reviewed articles of why this may be relevant. The fifth paragraph may be unnecessary for the points you are trying to make. The biggest focus would be to use ideas from your sources and make sure you link the ideas to the sources you use and that the ideas give insight to how language and gender intersect and why this matters. What kind of ideas does this employ? For the article being well developed, you embodied some good contribution for the article. Just remember to find a good place for these contributions and cite each information that is taken from your sources!