User:Sophiagreco/Mariatu Kamara/Henrik30nyr Peer Review

General info
Sophiagreco
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sophiagreco/Mariatu_Kamara?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Mariatu Kamara

Evaluate the drafted changes
Writer has done a good job adding additional sources and clarifying what has already been written. Might consider adding more dates and specific information to her background. Also try expanding information from after the war about her life in Canada as right now it’s kind of redundant with the last sentence in the previous section. Maybe add a little more about her written work and her work as a peace activist after her experience in the war.