User:Sophiaschortmann/Snailfish/Daynafreeman Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tornewt


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sophiaschortmann/Snailfish?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Snailfish

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Great job! I think you provided some great information about the snailfish to add to the page, which looks like it has not recently incorporated new evidence. Your physical descriptions of the snailfish were clear, and you presented findings from the genomic analysis concisely.
 * One way to add some helpful information to your draft is to add links to certain words that have not been previously linked to on the page, such as rhodopsin, that may help the reader who is unfamiliar with certain more technical words to find out some more information.
 * For more grammatical parts I noticed, I would add a comma after Pseudoliparis swirei in the first sentence you wrote. Also, very small, but instead of saying despite previous thoughts I would say something like despite previous evidence just to solidify your information.
 * In the first sentence where you mention the recent findings of a species, if you know the year it was found that might be helpful to add.