User:Sophie Bazan/Lake Geneva/LoganLW2 Peer Review

There are issues with the way your article reads and is phrased, it would benefit from a good proofreading. For example, I think that the meaning would be more clear if you combined " the lake was originally formed by a glacier as it withdrew" and "The Rhone glacier withdrew from the area about 12,000 years ago, which gave the lake its signature crescent shape" into one statement. Maybe Lake Geneva was formed 12,000 years ago by the withdrawing Rhone glacier or Lake Geneva's crescent formation resulted from the withdraw of the Rhone glacier 12000 years ago. It would be nice to see in a final draft, perhaps separating natural history and physical form from your description of the lakes current ecology. I think that generally in this draft, a bit more separation and organization would be good. I don't get a good idea of the lakes ecology, maybe include the names of some species and speak more about the region of the lake as it relates to lake temperature. I also think that referring to the meltwater as "glacial" is a bit confusing, maybe just say "meltwater".

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