User:Sophiegeary/Seattle Aquarium/Madisonrockw18 Peer Review

General info
Sophiegeary
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sophiegeary/Seattle Aquarium
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Seattle Aquarium

Lead

 * The lead is very concise and gives people a quick overview on the topic
 * I may suggest previewing the sections “exhibits and conservation” so people can know what to expect in the article, but it would also probably be fine as is
 * You do a great job of previewing your exhibits and conservation sections, but like I said these intros could also go in your lead depending on how you want to organize it. You could say “It is home to ___ (# of exhibits) located among two buildings and a soon-to-be Ocean Pavilion opening summer of 2024” just to give a preview. You make the call, but I feel like the lead could use just a touch more information.

Content

 * Nice job updating the exhibits! It is really important that those are current.
 * Conservation info is up to date as well.
 * I’m wondering if the section on popular culture is necessary. To me it almost seems like it distracts from the information about the aquarium itself. Especially since the pop culture reference is based on a factionalized Seattle Aquarium, I question whether this section belongs in the article. Is there maybe a different reference you could add? I am wondering if any famous people have been there, or if any notable events have taken place at the actual aquarium.

Tone and Balance

 * Content is mostly neutral, especially in “conservation” section.
 * I would suggest looking over the “Exhibits” section and ensuring that the neutral tone is persistent.
 * Some statements in the exhibits portion give off a slightly “promotional” tone. It would only require a change in one or two words to make the tone feel more neutral. For example, I think the line “A window in the Veterinary Care Center allows visitors to watch marine life examinations by veterinary staff in the clinic”, gives super great information, and provides it in a neutral tone.
 * On the other hand, there are a few times where the exhibit says “visitors can” which gives off a tone that sounds similar to how the Seattle Aquarium would phrase it when trying to promote themselves. For example, “The Ring of Life features a 12 foot (3.7 m) high glass "donut" where visitors can be surrounded by moon jellies” sounds like a promotional statement rather than a neutral one. I might suggest “The Ring of Life includes a high glass “donut” where visitors are surround by moon jellies”. The slight change in wording might make it sound more neutral.

Sources and References

 * Sources and references are accurate and all up to date
 * I am not sure if there is an issue with my computer, but for some reason I can’t click on the embedded links, but I can get to the sources from the references list at the bottom. Might be good to double check.
 * Since most of your sources are from the Seattle Aquarium website (which I think is appropriate for this topic), I am wondering if you are able to diversify the reference list a little bit. I see you have a couple news articles, but it may help if you can find some more information from an outside source.

Organization

 * The content is well organized and easy to read
 * The only organizational suggestion I have is to look at your lead and see if you want to add those section intro sections to your lead instead.

Images and Media

 * There are two images on the page, both add substance to the article and are visually appealing
 * I am wondering if the map image could be zoomed out a touch so that people not familiar with the area can be better acquainted with the location of the aquarium
 * I would also suggest adding at least one photo of the exhibits - you could even go to the aquarium and take a picture yourself!