User:Sophier7416/Black existentialism/Leprachaun38 Peer Review

General info
Sophier7416
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sophier7416/Black_existentialism?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Black existentialism:
 * Black existentialism:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- Lead concisely describes topic

- You need to add all the topics you will cover in your introduction

- Possibly go into more detail about critical race theory because i was confused what that meant

- you mention Cornel West and Malcom X but you don't cover them in your article body

Content:

- Content is relevant

- Some missing content that you mention in intro

- I looove the topic you chose and it definitely raises awareness for an underrepresented topic

Tone:

- Content is neutral and unbiased

- Doesn't attempt to persuade

- You focus alot on W.E.B. Du Bois and i'm sure he is very important to the topic but you should go into more detail about one or two more activists. A person that come to my mind was Langston Hughes.

Sources:

- Reliable and current sources

- number of sources is good

- I had trouble with the links but i think its just bc it isn't on the actual article yet

Organization:

- Introduction is organized

- Body can be split up into 2 different sections after you talk about W.E.B. Du Bois

- Each major point should have its own paragraph

Overall:

- You have improved this article so much, very good job props to you queen

- You have strong descriptions and i feel like i even learned a lot

- Maybe you could add a new topic or person that isn't included in the original article that is important to the topic.