User:Sourpatchkid10/Civic nationalism/That guy5947 Peer Review

Lead:

The lead loses the alternate titles for civic nationalism, which I personally think should be included. Those additional terms can help those who have heard alternate terms get redirected to the article page.

This sentence right here:

Civil Nationalism fails to take the idea of transitioning from a establishment to a full city to a concept of a nation-state in mind

Has no further discussion in the article and seems to be argumentative. I recommend it is rephrased or removed. If kept more explanation on this concept, maybe in the critiques section, will be needed.

Body:

The lead section of this article is very robust, the body paragraphs of original article seem to need most work. Including examples throughout history is a good start, but critiques section desperately needs expansion or to be removed.

Another body paragraph that could be added is the research by political scientists into the concept of civic nationalism ( look at nationalism page for reference)

All the additions of historical examples should probably need references when discussing them. Not sure what the policy on citations is in that scenario.

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