User:SpaceCanyon/Wadjet/Hvkmbr0818 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SpaceCanyon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:SpaceCanyon/Wadjet


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Wadjet

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead evaluation

The addition at the end of the lead (About Tebtunis) is good information to add, but the wording is a bit too close to the original article you are citing. Really interesting article to cite, good choice.

Appearance evaluation

Good move removing "As a patron goddess" from the Appearance section, it wasn't adding much to the article.

The third paragraph in appearance detailing how she is depicted as a cobra for the second time I think can go.

"While the Icheumon probably serves as a depiction of Wedjat's role in seeing for Horus." This sentence doesn't seem like it should be standing on its own, could you connect it to another sentence?

Make sure to link to the wiki page Ichneumonidae for your added section about the variation in her animal head forms. Great restating of the information from the source!

[unspecific to a specific section, but i like the way you reorganized the etymology to go after the protector section]

Protector of country, pharaohs, and other deities evaluation

GREAT move changing "Eventually" to "From around the 4th dynasty onward". Specificity!

I think changing "Two Ladies or nebty" to "nebty ('Two Ladies')" would look a bit better.

Great informational additions here.

Gallery evaluation

Great images that all seem to follow Wikipedias guidelines. I think you could bring one of the statue pictures up to the Appearance section!