User:SpaceCanyon/Wadjet/Lightfootcrytpkeeper Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SpaceCanyon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:SpaceCanyon/Wadjet?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Wadjet

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * Well built article! Lead is powerful

Clarity:


 * Lots of links and lots of citations. Maybe clean up the page a bit? After one or two links, I'd cut it down.

Coverage Balance:


 * Good coverage

Neutrality:


 * Neutral tone, well done

References:


 * Add more photos, and break up links a bit more

Spelling/Grammar etc:


 * See clarity section

Additional comments:

Wonderful draft! I enjoy your formatting, and the expansion of each section is very helpful. I was wondering if you were willing to cut the "Other Uses" section, as I feel it detracts from the flow of the Wikipedia article. I think, perhaps, you could find a few more sources? Your sources seem to be a bit more up to date than the original article, but a general focus on cleaning up the whole article will make this stellar. I don't have much to say other than keep polishing, and you'll have a great article.