User:SpaceJam508/Lesbians in the Spanish democratic transition period/Outdooradventurer22 Peer Review

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SpaceJam508
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Lead

I think the lead section could be a little bit more broad. Maybe if you don't mention that specific law just yet, you can just explain that the transition period was more tolerant to non straight identities or something like that. Also, you probably need a source in the lead section.

Content

I think you have a lot of good content here. One suggestion I have is to overall seek to avoid repetition--there were a few instances in the background paragraph where I felt that sentences could be combined to make the article more streamlined. As I continued reading the article, I noticed redundancy throughout, so I'd just go through and streamline it a bit. I'd also suggest avoiding the language "having been" in the first section and instead begin by explaining what happened to Lesbians during Francoist Spain before transitioning into the information on the democratic transition period.

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Tone and Balance

I think the tone is objective throughout, but I'd make sure to streamline the language where possible to make it less repetitive.

Organization

I think the organization is good! You have the background, political situation, culture, organizations, and media. My only thought would be to put the media near the culture section, since those are so closely tied, and maybe move the organizations section near the political section (I'm not sure, but is some of the material in that section repetitive with the political section?).

Images and Media

If you can, I think it would be cool to find more images to add throughout! It's a long article, so images would help to break it up.

Overall Impresions

Overall, I think this article is super important to have, and I think you're doing a good job getting a lot of information out there!!