User:SpamwiseFamgee/Primary succession/Hcg35 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SpamwiseFamgee


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:SpamwiseFamgee/Primary_succession?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Primary succession

Evaluate the drafted changes
The changes made in the article were not drastic but necessary. Throughout the article, information is sprinkled into the draft in sentences and paragraphs. In the first section (primary succession), there seems to be a lot of information about a certain case study. While the case study in question is pertinent to the information, the placing of this information is suspect. I believe that a more suitable location would be lower in the article. In addition, the examples section contained a lot of "filler" information. For example, mentioning the location of every major volcanic or glacial event was somewhat unnecessary, as compared to going into the details of the events that occurred in that location as they related to primary succession. However, the article was unbiased and a pleasant read, and the reader ended the article knowing more about primary succession than before.