User:Sparamin/Resource war/AwaltonUW Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sparamin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sparamin/Resource_war?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Resource war

Evaluate the drafted changes
- need to properly cite facts

- Grammar is odd in some places (The first line should be "A resource war" or "Resource wars are")

- You need images, I'd recommend an image of the sea birds you talk about as well as the guano itself

- I think you should break up the Body Article into smaller, more readable passages, its quite dense and hard to read (maybe go into detail about the guano act in its own section)