User:Sparklehorse23/National Action Plan for Climate Change/Sammwise39% Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sparklehorse23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w iki/ User:Sparklehorse23/National_Action_Plan_for_Climate_Change?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Khalistan movement
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Khalistan movement

Evaluate the drafted changes
Tone & Balance

The content added can be more neutral. For instance, in the following sentence: "The budget announced by the central government has also failed to met (sic) the promises made", the use of the words, "failed" and "promises" are rather emotive in nature, and appear to be making a broader claim than what is supported by the facts that were laid out in subsequent sentences. Perhaps more evidence from a greater number of authors might help you better support this claim.

Sources and References

Some of the claims made in the article are not supported by sufficient secondary source material. For example, the following claims did not have any supporting citations:


 * 1) "The slow progress has also contributed to deteriorating farmer living standard as farmers experiencing frequent climate impacts while lacking the infrastructure and climate-related remedies proposed under NAPCC."
 * 2) "For example, as part of the initiating partners of the Coalition for Disaster Resilient Infrastructure, Modi has proposed a $10 billion total investment to the World Solar Bank, yet is only willing to contribute $ 600 million."

Organization

Content added does contain a number of grammatical and spelling errors that can be rectified on a second read. I have listed some examples below:


 * 1) "The budget announced by the central government has also failed to met (sic) the promises made" - should be "failed to meet" instead of "failed to met"
 * 2) "The slow progress has also contributed to deteriorating farmer living standard as farmers experiencing frequent climate impacts while lacking the infrastructure and climate-related remedies proposed under NAPCC." — it should be "living standards" instead of "living standard