User:Spearstrike/Skwelwil'em Squamish Estuary Wildlife Management Area/Boxfishy Peer Review

General info
Spearstrike
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Spearstrike/Skwelwil'em Squamish Estuary Wildlife Management Area
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Under “lead from original draft”, the sentence “ The wildlife management area is on the traditional territory of Squamish Nation, which is involved in management of the area.” is a but redundant, maybe say “the traditional territory of the Squamish Nation, which the estuary is on, is involved with the management of the area.

Consider combining “lead” with “overview”

Elaborate on the geography, add in more specifics like coordinates, size, elevation, types of land (rock, grass, cliffs etc.), and anything else you might want to. Also elaborate on wildlife, maybe mention what kinds of migratory birds, amphibians, or any other wildlife that wouldnt require a long list. For example don't elaborate on the kinds of “hundreds of birds”, that would be a very long list. Maybe explain why it is a high biodiversity area, what makes that possible.

I think you have done a good job at keeping the articles tone neutral and factual. It contains information that gives the reader a picture of what the estuary is about. What I got from the article is as follows: Skwelwil'em Squamish Estuary Wildlife Management Area was established in 2007 for the management of fish and wildlife on the traditional land of Squamish territory. It utilizes integrated management approaches, and research is conducted there too. The reason it was created was because in the 1970s, the land would have been used for coal extraction, an environmentally damaging activity. Its geography is interesting as it mixes freshwater and seawater, creating high biodiversity. It also houses a handful of endangered species.

I think that your article meets a minimum of the 5 topics that were outlined in the peer editing rubric; “Description of the issues/goals that led to the creation of the protected area”, “Information about First Nations whose traditional and ancestral territory/ies are included in the protected area”, “ Whether First Nations are currently included in management decision making processes for the protected area, and either way, what their priorities are for the management of and access to the area”, and “Information about what species can be found in the protected area (plants, animals, other species)”

I think the information is well balanced and isn't overly detailed in areas it shouldn't be. I think the sources used are appropriate.~