User:SpeedReader&GrammarEnthusiast/Nonverbal learning disorder/Leanna321 Peer Review

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SpeedReader&GrammarEnthusiast


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 * User:SpeedReader&GrammarEnthusiast/Nonverbal learning disorder


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 * Nonverbal learning disorder

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you bring up great points in your sandbox. I think changing the word to syndrome is a good change because I see that word used most in the sources I skimmed over. I see the possible misdiagnosis of ADHD mentioned later in the article, so I agree with removing the last sentence of the lead. However, maybe you could still mention in the lead section that there are comorbidities as well as conditions that are commonly confused with symptoms of NVLD. I feel like this is an important part of the topic since there is not a standard diagnostic criteria yet. I found the long quotes in the original article (one quote in the Signs and symptoms section and three quotes in the Diagnosis section) to be a little distracting and overcomplicated. Maybe you could implement some of this information into the article to remove so many direct quotes to make the information flow together better. Also, I’m not sure how important this is or if there’s a reason for it, but I noticed that sources #3 and #19 in the original article are both repeats of source #2, so maybe you could remove those citations. I noticed this about source #6 as well.