User:Sphung11/Onewheel/Kelseycluett Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sphung11


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * N/A


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Onewheel

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Sphung11, there is a lot of content gap within your article, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you decide to fill in information.

Lead

The lead of this article is relatively complete and concise. There is not an overflow of detail, and there is nothing mentioned within the lead that is not mentioned within the article.

Content

There is a large gap of content about Onewheel, but the information within the article is relatively up-to-date. I would recommend including sub-headings for each of the Onewheel models that are very briefly mentioned. Additionally including pictures differentiating between the models can be beneficial as a way of filling that content gap, and providing an engaging article. Another way to change around the article would be through making a separate heading for the founder to discuss his accomplishments, and then under the history heading, you can solely discuss the history and invention of the Onewheel itself.

Tone and Balance

The information in the text is neutral, and does not appear to be biased or persuasive.

Sources and References

There is a multitude of sources imbedded within the text, which all seem to be relatively reliable. The links provided within the references are in working order, and they are all relevant to the information discussed within the Wikipedia page. I would recommend looking for any scholarly sources that provide background information.

Organization

The organization on the Onewheel wikipedia page is efficient and well-organized. Some more sub-headings or information may be added for more clarity under the "Operation" heading and the "Models" heading. Any grammatical errors may need to be fixed as well.

Images and Media

There is a single photo showing what the Onewheel looks like, although, I do think it would be beneficial to show more pictures based on the different models of the Onewheel.

Overall Impressions

The article chosen has a good foundation for success, and there is considerable amounts of content gap that can be applied in order to improve the article. You may improve the article by adding more information on the differing models of the Onewheel, which will clearly depict the comparisons and benefits from each model. Looking into improving the information, adding any scholarly sources, and hyperlinks may be great ways to improve the article and begin filling your content gap.