User:Sphung11/Onewheel/Sarahdanes Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sphung11


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * (No draft link found so I'm assuming the article was directly edited and will peer review that)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Onewheel
 * Onewheel

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

- lead reflects current content of the article

- lead is concise and clearly explains the article topic

- lead does not include a description of the articles major sections

- first sentence can be made more concise as it is quite wordy, and provides information about the use of the onewheel that is unnecessary in the lead. it may not be necessary to include that the onewheel is often described as a electric skateboard right after it has already been explained

Content

- the current content in the article, especially what was recently added (as shown in the "view history" page) is all relevant to the topic at hand

- content is up to date

- all content included is relevant and needed

- the article does not deal with an topic that is historically underrepresented

Tone and balance

- article is neutral

- no biased claims are made

- article does not overrepresent or underrepresent information

- content added does not persuade the reader in any way

Sources and References

- the sentence "Future Motion Inc. was first headquartered in Mountain View, California" is not cited, and this information cannot be found in the source referenced in the sentence following this one

- about half of the sources in the article are from other articles that are advertising this product so information from these articles may be biased

- content accurately reflects the sources info

- sources are thorough and current

- diverse sources are present however some may be biased as explained above

- other less biased sources are available on the web

- links are available and work

Organization

- content added recently, and previous content is well written

- minor grammar errors are present for example in the second sentence of the lead the word "riders" should be written as "rider's" (correct noun form)

- additionally commas are present in some places where they are not needed

- content and sections are well organized

Images and Media

- images and media were not added

- one image present from previous contributions

- image is well captioned

- the image enhances understanding of the topic and is positioned off to the right of a paragraph in a visually appealing way

- the image adheres to wikipedia's copyright guidelines

Overall Impressions

- recent additions to the article have made it more complete

- added content can be improved by finding info from more reliable sources - probably the biggest issue with this article

Feedback:

- article is very well organized, neutral and well written

- article is simple, but still includes all relevant and needed content to thoroughly explain this topic

- IMPORTANT: find more reliable sources as much of the information in the article is from sources that seem biased

- the first sentence in the lead can also be edited to be less wordy and only include necessary info

- minor grammar errors should be corrected

- for my own article I will ensure that my sources are unbiased and reliable as well as this is very important