User:Sponge37/Third Party Non-violent Intervention/Maalmor Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sponge37


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sponge37/Third_Party_Non-violent_Intervention?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Third Party Non-violent Intervention

Evaluate the drafted changes
Looking at the history of the article, I see that the previous person had deleted all content, and that was 12 years ago. Sponge37 is, therefore, creating the article from scratch. So far, the lead is satisfactory, as it provides a clear idea of what TPNI is. The only thing I would change within the lead is the format, since it usually takes the form of a paragraph instead of using lists. It also should reference a source.

The Contents box is helpful and organized, though some background to the practice would also be helpful, as well as a section on current conflicts where it is being applied. A proper list of TPNI practitioners could be constituted as its own section. Either that or adding an External Links section with all the organizations' websites.

Lastly, it would be nice if you could find an image or two of the practice, so that people can identify the action with its name. I believe there is a famous case of inter-positioning in which a British (or was she German? I am not sure) girl named Rachel was killed/murdered in Israel while trying to prevent a digger from knocking down someone's house.

I see that there are quite a few sources listed, but they are not cited, so I assume the article is still a work in progress and not ready for publication.

I look forward to reading the rest of the content in the different sections to learn more about the subject.