User:Springfrog32/Sequoia National Park/Trufflehunter5 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Springfrog32


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Springfrog32/Sequoia_National_Park?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sequoia National Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead of the article gives a good overview of the topic but an edit explaining the consequences of Sequoia Complex wildfire would be a nice addition to the section. The content in the human history section provides helpful information that touches on the transitions the park has undergone. Adding more information about the indigenous people and the Buffalo soldiers would be a great addition to the article. It seems that these groups have had a large impact on the park but other sections of the article do not seem to recognize that. I would suggest going more in-depth with indigenous practices in the area as well as different tasks carried out by the Buffalo Soldiers as their actions have probably shaped the parks appearance. Many citations can be added to this section as well in order to the make the information seem more reliable. The link to the Buffalo Soldiers wikipedia page is helpful and will allow readers to easily explore more into the topic. The content added has a neutral perspective and backing it up with sources will help strengthen the section of the page. The content has improved the quality of article and gives a more accurate historical representation of the park.