User:SprinterMLS/Menstruation hut/Coultere3 Peer Review

General info
SprinterMLS
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:SprinterMLS/Menstruation hut
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Menstruation hut

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that this is a great start! There is a lot of information provided in the edit and it is conveyed very well. I think the source you used is very credible and the information you got out of it does help expand the knowledge on menstruation huts. Some suggestions I do have is to better organize the sentences. Right now they seem the be very bland and similar to one another, many of them starting with "The women..." or something similar. I also think that it might be helpful to have a general idea about where the two cultures you mention are placed on a map, I know that they are in Indonesia, but a brief description of them might help better understand how menstruation huts effect their culture or beliefs. I think that transitions would help it all flow together a lot better and create a more structured article. Overall, I think that the topic you chose is very interesting and that the research you have done so far is clear in this edit, but just tweaking a bit of the structure could allow what you want to convey about menstruation huts be a lot clearer to readers.