User:Spritestar/Corporate propaganda/Jenct93 Peer Review

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The Lead is great, very informative, but I would watch out for contractions words like "wasn't" needs to be spelled out because this is a formal publication, even casual.

One thing I caught was the use of 1 for "World War 1" I Googled this: "In APA format, you would write out "World War II" as "World War II" (without the quotation marks) and include the capitalization as shown. It is also important to include the date range for the war, such as "1939-1945" in parentheses immediately following the full name of the war. For example, "World War II (1939-1945)." the number, but I think it's more proper to use Roman Numerals in Journalistic Writing."

In History, I am finding a few possessions errors in Grammars I would run it trough Grammarly to check possession. I am not the best but if I read it out loud and it sounds awkward, it should be checked. I keep them bookmarked on my browser for the APA citation page too. This page has saved me so many times - https://www.grammarly.com/citations/apa

Doing Rubrik for review, sorry it took me a ton of time to find the file.

Thanks,

Jennifer