User:Spsalaza/Edmond Atkin/Alexismfox1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Spsalaza


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Spsalaza/Edmond Atkin/Edmond Atkin
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content


 * the content added is relevant but not necessarily up to date (the source included is a book written in 1967 by Edmond Atkin himself so is thus reliable) but it would help to include a scholarly article that was published in recent times
 * there is no content that does not belong but there should be more information. The information provided is a really great summary of Atkin's life but I would like to see this broken down into different sections, i.e. early life, how he was appointed by the Board of Trade, etc. to provide a more chronological narration of his story

Tone and Balance


 * the information added is neutral and avoids bias or persuasion

Sources and References


 * The first sentence is supported by a reliable source, however the last few sentences r not. Cite the source that claims he was appointed by the Board of Trade and discusses the Edmond Atkin Report or find a course that can confirm that this information is valid.
 * while a good source considering it comes from Edmond Atkin himself, it is not current so there should be other current articles that support this source

Organization


 * The information is clear and concise
 * there are no grammatical errors
 * Information should be broken up into sections for easy navigation (as mentioned above)

Images and Media


 * There are no images or media to support the text

Overall Impression


 * This article is a strong start but lacks completeness and depth
 * If there is limited information available about Edmond Atkin, try narrowing your search instead of just searching his name in the search engine (early life of Edmond Atkin, political beliefs, etc.)
 * Creating sections in the article will break up the information, allowing for easy reading and navigation. it will also help guide your research! Try referencing Wiki pages for other historical figures to get an idea of how they organize information for that person.

Good luck!