User:Squamelia/Plankton/Emma113144 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Squamelia


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Squamelia/Plankton?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Plankton

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi. I looked at your sandbox draft and it appears to be a bunch of bullet points so I looked at the draft to see what you have added. I think that most of the content you have added is good and relevant to the topic. However, a few of your sentences are poorly written, mainly "It's been shown that plankton spatial patterns are present in patchy marine environments where there aren't many fish populations and additionally, their dynamics are influenced by the fish predation rate in their environment. Depending on the predation rate, they could express regular or chaotic behavior". Also what is chaotic behavior? Another sentence that could use some work is "Of all animal poops, whale poop is the 'trophy', while in the ocean, phytoplankton are the powerhouse and one of their main nutrients is whale poop. In the marine food web, phytoplankton are at the bottom and are consumed by zooplankton & krill, intern being preyed upon by larger and larger marine organisms so it can be said that whale poop fuels the whole food web." Firstly, saying "of all animal poops, whale poop is the 'trophy'" does not feel as subjective as most Wikipedia content is and should be. Secondly, what do you mean phytoplankton are the powerhouse? And "one of their main nutrients is whale poop" did you forget to say that it is a SOURCE of nutrients? Whale poop is not a nutrient, but nutrient-rich. You said "intern" instead of "in turn" which are two very different things. I think carefully reading what you add to the article as well as adding a bit more information would be helpful. Good luck!