User:Srh030/Juvenile myelomonocytic leukemia/Zcc002 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Srh030


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Srh030/Juvenile_myelomonocytic_leukemia?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to current article (if it exists)
 * Juvenile myelomonocytic leukemia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Minor edits.


 * Cite where you found that it's "commonly those aged four and younger"

Signs and symptoms


 * no major edits
 * add links to the symptoms and maybe remove the parentheses for a cleaner look. ex. hepatomegaly (enlarged liver)
 * remove ", with" before nonspecific s/s since the symptoms before are the nonspecific s/s being listed. Also the comma does not fit.

Genetics


 * not sure if you removed words and replaced them with others, a strike though would have helped.

Diagnosis


 * no edits

Splenectomy


 * Cite "However, the impact..."
 * Following splenectomy, penicillin may have to be administered daily to protect the patient against bacterial infections "that" the spleen would otherwise have protected against;

Chemotherapy


 * Cite "intensive chemotherapy" bullet point

Radiation


 * Cite radiation section
 * Looks a bit plain, add some more information or combine with another section

Stem cell transplantation


 * Cite "even though transplant-related..."
 * Cite "After a transplant..."

Prognosis


 * I wouldn't use "most prominent" since it's used to describe something that's more projected. Try "most leading"