User:Srivera6/Behavior informatics/Mpatel48 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sriveria6


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Srivera6/Behavior_informatics?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Behavior informatics

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi! So I underlined texts to edit throughout your section.

First off, this article seems like an interesting topic to research into! The lead looks good so far but I think you can add in areas of topic you plan to include in the body. It seems to be that your article is recently published and is lacking content in the original form. You will need to come up with more points to add to the overall article. Your lead section is informative and concise, but I do not see where you plan to go. The background for this topic is covered well. I would like to see how this topic could be expanded and your thoughts on the topic itself. Your entry also does a good job of staying relevant and not including factors or sources that are random. You are lacking the equity gap and how BI could affect it, so you could include some research on this if you feel like it will relate to other content. The tone seems neutral and your diction is well incorporated. It doesnt seem if the viewpoints are biased. The citations included all seem to work well, and they look to be in the correct format. I would definitely look at your articles citation and see if you can find more based off what is already shown. Since your article is new it is hard to see where you would like to gear the body. I have listed a few methods to incorporate, feel free to use these ideas or come up with your own. I look forward to seeing the addition and changes you plan to make!

Some ideas you can incorporate are:

- how BI effects different professions (nursing, business, teaching, etc)

- how BI is used for Telehealth

- how BI is effecting patient satisfaction levels

- how BI is implemented with COVID or other pandemics