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 Article Evaluation 

I would like to reword the section of the plot summary that talks about Parker following a "bad" crowd. It appears to be bias. I would probably phrase it like "Parker's mother grew up very religious but as he got older Parker he estranged himself from her and her lifestyle and began drinking and smoking."

The part about Parker's mom taking him to a protestant revival doesn't add anything, its an unneccesary detail

Mentioning being hit with a broom when he meets sarah ruth is inaccurate because that doesn't happen until the end. It's messing up the plot sequence.

The link for reference #8 did not work, bur it also could just be a connection issue

The Elaine Whitaker quote isn't needed, the book has nothing to do with her and she isn't mentioned previously in the article.

"Parker sped on, then stopped. His heart appeared to cut off; there was absolute silence. It said as plainly as if silence were a language itself, GO BACK. Parker returned to the picture – the haloed head of a flat stern Byzantine Christ with all-demanding eyes. He sat there trembling; his heart began slowly to beat again as if it were being brought to life by a subtle power." This whole paragraph is a quote from the story explaining what the tattoo was when it can easily be explained with one sentence.