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"The idea of Black History has stirred controversy since its inception and continues to be an important issue in the educational arena. Opponents of Black History have argued that its implementation into the curriculum will be dishonest, divisive, and will make children ill prepared for the work force. Proponents of Black History believe that it will promote cultural diversity, develop self-esteem, and correct many of the myths espoused by the Euro-centric centered curriculum. Carter G. Woodson was confronted with many of the current arguments that attempt to keep Black History out of the curriculum. Seltzer, Frazier, and Rick (1996) note that some conservative scholars have argued that Black History and multicultural education result in dishonesty, with little academic credibility. Others in opposition of multicultural education and, in particular, Afrocentricity, believe that such implementation into the current curriculum will "make Europe and the U.S. rogue elephants of the world history" (Bennett, 1992). According to Bennett, Afrocentrists will assert that North American culture is an offshoot of Western European philosophy and that both are offshoots of African culture. Black History serves the purpose of helping African Americans understand themselves by looking at the uniqueness and origin of their history in relation to the development of world history. Black History would encourage African Americans to embrace their personal identity as opposed to self-negating one's self"

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Intended Additional Information
Universally, a reliable education system is consistently one of the most important pillars of society. Among that pillar, the existence of Black History Month has frequently been a topic of debate in the educational field. On one end, a concern is that the inclusion of black history will discredit the accuracy of history as well as exclude the crucial parts, and distract children from what really matters when they enter their desired careers. But before Black History Month became official, Negro History Week was the center of the equation. The thought-process behind the week was never recorded, but scholars acknowledge two reasons for its birth: recognition and importance. Woodson felt deeply that at least one week would allow for the general movement to become something annually celebrated. Also, after the ten year long haul to successfully complete his "Journal of Negro History", he realized the subject deserved to resonate with a greater audience. Now Black History month once again is the topic of debate. Its supporters argue Black History will integrate much needed cultural inclusion and promote a positive, accepting environment where students can correctly learn the history of a people in a primarily Caucasian single story. Other critiques conclude it's existence will do damage to the position of Europe and the United States in their places of world history.

Wenqi's Feedback
You writing is good and interesting. I think it can be added to the section talking about the Black History Month in the United Stated. What do you think? Please see my comments in the above bold brackets. Also, ensure that you add citations at the end of each paragraph when you move your writing to the Wikipedia article.

Brittany's Feedback
Content: The overall content is good in this writing, everything makes sense and goes along with the wiki article.

Organization: I think this writing is very well organized and has a very good flow to it, the parts fit very well together and the grammar and spelling look good and seem to have no issues.

Tone: I think the tone is good, it is appropriate for an encyclopedia audience.

Sources: You didn't talk much about the sources and didn't have any within this writing, I think my only suggestion would be to add a source in this and talk about it a little more.

Overall very good writing.

1. Content:
The content fits with the original article, and by using a quote from Morgan Freeman, it keeps it up to date.

2. Organization:
The added section has a good flow, but might fit better if it was added to the original section where it talks about education to avoid the article jumping around.

3. Tone:
The added information has differing viewpoints to keep the overall article unbiased and to show both sides of the argument.

4. Sources:
Currently, there are not cited sources, so just make sure you add at least one to make the information credible.

Mya's Feedback
Overall I think you paraphrased really well, however, you could use more evidence on what makes Black History Month contradicting within the education system. Go in to depth more about how it can beneficial to students. Maybe add in some statistic proving it is better for children. You did really well on sentence structure, and your purpose is clear and gets to the point. You did really well with keeping your tone neutral. Be sure to add citations and sources.