User:St3ffsK/House of CB/Alyssadebragga Peer Review

General info
St3ffsK
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:St3ffsK/House of CB
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):House of CB

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead and introductory sentence have not changed from the original article to the sandbox draft, but I do not see it as a huge issue since the original article sums everything up quite well. The intro article does not mention anything about the added information that you have supported this stub article with though, so I would recommend mentioning that (the brand evolution). The lead is not overly detailed. It gives a brief description of the brand and its history and paves the way for the rest of the article. Overall well done, but preview the paragraph you added in your sandbox.

Content:

The content you've added is relevant and up to date. I like how you brought social media into the discussion as I would agree the company is very tied/connected to social media such as Instagram and Tik Tok. Personally, I see a lot of ads and promo content for this brand on my pages so it seems very relevant for you to have added this section and information. This article does not address topics related to underrepresented populations.

Tone and balance:

The content you've added seems to be neutral to me and doesn't pose any issues regarding opinion based commentary or discussion. I'm not seeing any opinions or bias which is good. I could maybe sense a little bit of persuasion in the language you use, coming off as a little promotional of the company, unintentionally obviously I assume, so maybe neutralize the "brand evolution" paragraph a tiny bit. Other than this, great work.

Sources and references:

I'm not noticing any new sources. This might be alright since there are already 12 in the original article, but it is a good idea to consider adding new sources with more current information to add to the article. House of CB is still a very trendy brand so you can definitely find some super current information on them I bet. The most current source you have is 2023 but I bet you could find one from this year. I recommend this to really increase the quality of your article. The existing links are working for me though so that is all a good start.

Organization:

Overall a great job in the paragraphs you added to the pre-existing article stub. The language is professional, concise, and well-written. No grammar or spelling issues that I can find. The content you've added is well organized, just consider adding a bit more to the middle portion of "brand evolution" to make it more than just two sentences and more of a solid section.

Images and media:

I don't believe you added any images or media to your draft and I highly recommend doing so. There are a ton of images you can use from online to exemplify the brand, from the House of CB website itself or somewhere else. Consider adding an image under the small section I just mentioned above in the "organization" section of this peer review. Photos of some of their different products would help give readers a way better idea of the company than before seeing no photos of House of CB's product.

Overall impression:

Overall, very well done article. You took a short stub-but-good article and added insightful, concise information in a professional, neutral tone. The content definitely adds to the article in my opinion. Your grammar and use of relevant information is a strength I'm noticing. I don't see any of your added work as unnecessary. Like I mentioned above, just consider neutralizing the language a bit in the last couple of paragraphs you added and add some content/imagery and I think you have a great article!