User:Star457/Quaker Instant Oatmeal/GlaciersareCool Peer Review

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Star457


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I liked the amount of detail you included in this article. In particular, I liked the descriptions of the different kinds of oats and how each of them are prepared and differ from each other.

For your lead, I think it might be best to start with a simple description of what the Quaker Oats Instant Oatmeal is rather than the company itself. While this information is still good to include, I think the first sentence should establish to the reader what you are talking about in the simplest terms possible.

Your preparation section was fun to read. It looks like these instructions come from the official Quaker Oats site and it might be good to state that. As it is, this section reads a bit more like instructions than an informational paragraph to me. I don't think you need to change it much or anything, just make it clear that this is how Quaker tells its users to prepare their products. Is there any history to how Quaker Oats came up with these specific instructions?

I liked your taste section as well. I did not realize that Quaker Oats differed significantly from more traditionally oatmeal. I might be good to change the heading of this section since it covers more than just the taste of the oats.

The differences between oats section was very interesting. While I think the current order is fine, it might be nice to include this section earlier in the article. Your taste section talks a lot about Old Fashioned oats and it would be nice to have a description what those are beforehand.

Overall, I think this was a great article!