User:Starkid25/Deir el-Medina/Lunabean0204 Peer Review

General info
User:Starkid25
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Starkid25/Deir el-Medina
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Deir el-Medina

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead Section

- Unsure if the lead section written is supposed to replace the lead in the article.

- No references used in the lead

- Only one paragraph. Does not introduce what will be talked about in the whole article

- Does provide a good sense of what Deri el-Medina is but could improve readability

- Need more writing from the writer to give an accurate review

Clarity of Article Structure

- Most of the writing is copied from the original article

- Curious what will be expanded from the writer

- Assuming structure will stay the same, aside from the new section on Religious Practices (wondering where this will be placed)

- Rewording and elaborating has been added to the end of the Village section

- Need more writing from the writer to give an accurate review

Coverage Balance

- The first village paragraph is lengthy and could be minimized/separated to be more reader friendly

- There is not a lot of information in the Religious Practices section, this could be added to, to equal out the writing in the sections

- On the original article, there is a section of Der el-Medina, suggestion to elaborate and/or find references for the section

- No viewpoints are added, very informational

- Need more writing from the writer to give an accurate review

Content Neutrality

- No biases are mentioned or attributed to. Writer stays within boundaries of informational writing. There are no point of views or personal comments addressed. Writing is light and positive.

- Need more writing from the writer to give an accurate review

Sources

- 2 sources were added. They are used briefly as they get right to the point. Reliable sources.

- There are sections that could have references added (already mentioned)

- no photos are added but I don't think any need to be unless useful to information. There is enough visual representation already.