User:Starryberry/Sheila Ortiz Taylor/Izaahd Peer Review

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In her books, Ortiz Taylor explores her Chicana identity through the details of her character descriptions and use of metaphors.

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Ortiz Taylor is of Mexican-American descent. Her grandmother was a Mexican-American Catholic woman from Los Angeles and Ortiz Taylor grew up in a household of “fourth–and fifth–generation, middle-class Mexican-Americans.” In her books, Ortiz Taylor explores her Chicana identity through the details of her characters and her use of metaphors. Through Arden in Faultline and Southbound, Ortiz Taylor brings up Arden’s Indigenous background, enjoying Mexican traditional and Tex-Mex food, remembering her family speaks Spanish, and the addition of Spanish words in her vocabulary. In Southbound, Ortiz Taylor describes Arden thinking about her connection to an Aztec ancestors and Mexico as her homeland. Critics of Ortiz Taylor view her references to her Chicana heritage as “superficial” because Arden “makes fun of her ‘Indian’ nose.” Critics also mention that her Chicanidad does not play a central role as Ortiz Taylor focuses mainly on lesbianism in her writing. In Imaginary Parents, the Ortiz Sisters reveal more about their Mexican Catholic heritage, eating and learning how to cook traditional foods. Reviewers of her trilogy starring Arden note that from the beginning of Faultline to OutRageous, Ortiz Taylor progressively writes more about her heritage.

I understand what you were trying to do in the Chicana Identity section, but I feel like it is more of a book review than it is a method for contextualizing the way Sheila Ortiz Taylor identifies as Chicana.

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Her work is critically acclaimed and is used as a critique of Chicano/literacy regarding gender and sexuality. Most of her work was as a novelist but she also worked as an English professor.[3]

Faultline was also considered the first Chicana lesbian literature published.

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This trend of relating her experiences to her books was also present in her novel, Southbound where she expands on her ethnic identity and Chicano traditions.[2]

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As it gained popularity within the global arena, however, the novel was soon translated to German & Italian and published as a British edition.

The summaries of the literature lacks clear flow between sentences and does not flow well in combination with other literary works.

Arden, much like Ortiz Taylor, is a Chicana, lesbian mother challenging gender norms and the opposition she faced from those around her, specifically her ex-husband.[4] If you don’t say how it comes off as opinion.

Not only does her sexual identity challenge gender norms in the United States, but it was also a struggle to grapple with this side of herself in the face of her Chicana identity.