User:StayClassy81/Lebanon Pioneer Cemetery/TheRubberDuckyOfDoom42 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

StayClassy81 (Jessica)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:StayClassy81/Lebanon_Pioneer_Cemetery?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:StayClassy81/Lebanon_Pioneer_Cemetery?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Jessica,

Interesting topic you've researched here. You've got a good lead and overview of the subject that you'll be discussing here, and set up the range of dates to expect.

Content/Organization:

What you have is informative and relevant, although the inferences on the key details of the graves, art and settlers, needs more content and more citation. You could probably combine Key Dates and Prominent Burials, and add in a photo to restructure the page. Your intro is a good length, but there needs to be more to the body paragraphs. Sell us on it's historical significance, go over the information one more time before we divulge into the two key details.

Tone and Balance:

Everything written so far is totally neutral. Good work! No claims, under/overrepresented positions or persuasion is used in the article, just statements of fact which is ideal. Keep this up in the final draft!

Sources:

Same thing as you said when discussing with me. There's only one source here, and while the source is very reliable, the National Park Service, it's not enough. You need 2-3 reliable sources at minimum for this work. Also, make sure to be citing the dates listed in "Key Dates," as there is no citation currently. Are there any news stories about this graveyard? Any descriptions on signs at the place? Local history museums?

Readability:

There's a few grammatical errors here. Make sure to check capitalization, like "Victorian," and work on sentence flow. Some sentences are very short and jarring, and ideally could be combined to make for an easier read.

Media:

Are there any photos of this graveyard? Photos would greatly assist in fleshing out this article and giving more information to the reader about why this graveyard is registered in the National Register of Historic Places. Additionally, if you could find pictures over time, that might be useful as well.

New Article Req. :

Make sure to make links to other articles to enhance it's discovery. Also, as mentioned before, make sure to add more sources to qualify for notability and for exhaustive research. Your use of categorization works well though, but as stated prior, combine Key Dates and Prominent Burials, as it's somewhat of a similar topic. You can even call it "Key Dates and Prominent Burials," just only use one timeline to clean up the page.

Summary:

In all, it's a good start. You're neutral and state vital information, give detailed descriptions of the graves and their decoration, and I personally like the "Key Dates" section. However, this article really needs to be fleshed out more. There's just not enough information or sources to publish this article.