User:Steeldanguy788/Ostracism/Floccinaucinihilipilification1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Steeldanguy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Steeldanguy788/Ostracism?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ostracism

Lead

 * Lead remains unchanged save for the addition of a source.

Content

 * Perhaps add what the emergency was for which Cimon was recalled.
 * Irrelevant information: "(and one not obvious from a modern perspective)"
 * Irrelevant information: "(being no worse than modern voting instruction cards)"
 * Mayhap adding who Cleisthenes was.
 * This sentence ends as it is quoted here. Consider deleting or adding to it. "During the ostracization of Themistocles, Plutarch"
 * What anecdote about Aristides is this story mentioned in?

Tone and Balance

 * Content speculates a bit like when stating that ordinary Athenians must have felt a certain power over the greatest members.
 * Consider changing "ejected a lowly member" to " ejected a member."
 * Maybe rephrasing the following as it is not necessary and is an assumption: "In Plutarch, following as he does the anti-democratic line common in elite sources, the fact that people might be recalled early. . ."
 * The last paragraph of the section Purpose is speculative and contains no sources or references.

Sources and References

 * Article lacks many sources and references in all sections.

Organization

 * Article is well organized into different sections with relevant content.

Images and Media

 * One added image. Consider adding images of the places where these votes took place or perhaps the ostracized people mentioned.