User:Stellaeve1515/Ana Castillo/Mjos02 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Stellaeve1515


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Stellaeve1515/Ana_Castillo?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is no real lead. There is an introductory paragraph that could possibly be converted to a lead. I think that it would have to have a bit more context from the book. Something like, "The Guardians is about a woman, Regina, and her nephew, Gabo, who await the return of Gabo's father after he decides to cross the US-Mexico border. Gabo, Regina, and her friend look for their lost loved ones, but are only met with death and violence..." and then a bit about people opinions on/reactions to the book.

I would not necessarily say the content is irrelevant. But this reads as an article about The Guardians and not Ana Castillo as a whole. If you choose to add more information about Castillo, I would suggest trimming the summary and speaking more about Castillo's career, and any relevant information about the book like reviews, her experience writing it, common critiques, sales volume, cultural impact. etc.

Your tone is mostly neutral. I think some words could be cut out like, "heartbreaking" or "unfortunately." You could remain more neutral but just calling things "difficult" or "violent."

Based on references, it looks like you have some good sources. Just make sure to had citations/footnotes.

I would suggest adding sections. At least a lead section and the summary of the book could go into its own section.

Overall, this is a good start. You have a great summary of the book and provide interesting information about the actual border for context. I would just add more information about Castillo, and/or more information about the book aside from plot.