User:Stellasuperba/Predatory advertising /Penguinblueberry Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Stellasuperba


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Stellasuperba/Predatory advertising
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the Drafted Changes 2
Lead

Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Yes, the lead might want to expand upon the information about the legality of predatory advertising. Maybe a sentence about whether or not these legal actions have been successful.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * Some parts of the lead could be cut down - removing either the bit about history or data analytic industries broadly.

Content

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * I think the content is pretty neutral - many different perspectives are represented by the article.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * I think it would be helpful to explain how predatory advertising firms respond to legal measures to ensure that both  sides are represented.

Sources and References

Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * “It's important to note that the use of algorithms may result in such targeted advertisement despite being built without any malicious intent. Those utilizing Machine Learning will "train" themselves to display advertisements that result in user-engagement based on prior interactions, which may reinforce and increase the rate at which vulnerable populations receive advertisements that "speak" to those vulnerabilities” needs a cite.
 * The Implication heading needs some cite. Overall the deception tactics heading could use more citations.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes

Organization

Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * No

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic
 * Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Yes, but missing details on the accessing personal information section
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * I think in some places, the lead is overly detailed. I think you could make the sentence about vulnerability a bit more concise. I think you should outline data collection/algorithmic testing in your lead.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Based on the bibliography, it looks as though information is up to date. The data collection header could have more up to date information, although I'm not sure if this is the most recent information.

Tone and Balance
The content is neutral. It seems that in some cases, there could be information removed from a section because it is redundant or unnecessary.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:

* All sources are reliable and thorough


 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes - under legislative measures I wonder if anything new, in terms of response to legislation, could be added to the article.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above


 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Yes
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
 * Yes - but it needs to add a list of hyperlinks at the bottom of the page that detail what the article is similar to.