User:Stepagco/Copolymer/Yungad Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Stepagco, Chlorinetwist, Dashanator


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Stepagco/Copolymer?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Copolymer
 * Copolymer

Evaluate the drafted changes
Introduction paragraph of Properties has good information and sets the stage well.

I think a lot of the sentences could be cleaned up to read a bit nicer. For example: Don't start a sentence with "so" and "Since vinyl acetate is more polar and larger than ethylene, the more vinyl acetate in PEVA, the higher polarity, lower crystallinity, more flexibility, and more adhesion" could be changed to "Vinyl acetate is larger and more polar than ethylene, so more vinyl acetate in PEVA will result in the higher polarity, lower crystallinity, more flexibility, and more adhesion" to change the first word "since" as it was used before. It is a draft though so yeah just do some more grammar proofreading too.

I liked the glass transition section. I liked how clear it was to direct the reader to more information about topics that would be useful to know.

The Characterization section had informative but brief sentences for each characterization method.

For the Applications section, maybe include a sentence about what a block copolymer is. There are also some unclear terms that would be beneficial to link to another Wikipedia article (so you don't have to explain it yourself if you don't want to). The terms include: coil formation, compact globular formation, micelles, and nanodiscs under the Alternating copolymers section.

Include images wherever possible so it's not just text.

Sources: I think there needs to be more citations throughout each paragraph for the Properties section. All the citations were at the end of each paragraph but that means each section is only from one source (that could be biased or slightly inaccurate). The last few paragraphs have a lot of sources which is good.