User:Stephxm/Telecommunications in the Republic of the Congo/Faridama Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

stephxm


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/courses/University_of_California,_Berkeley/African_Politics_(Spring_2022)/students/articles/Stephxm?showArticle=239572364


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Telecommunications in the Republic of the Congo

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead for the page, "Telecommunications in the Republic of the Congo" is brief and outlines the article's contents in approximately six sections. Although it does not appear that my peer has changed the lead section, I believe the information that they have included flows naturally into the lead section their draft is concentrated on. I find my peer's topic to be both interesting and necessary, since it addresses how leaders in the Congo have undermined freedom of speech to prevent their citizens from participating in democratic efforts. The tone of my peer's contribution is neutral, and the language is eloquent and concise. I believe it may be useful to include links to pages that are made for notable figures, such as Presidents Youlou and Massamba-Debat that are mentioned in the draft. Moreover, I would recommend that my peer continues to elaborate upon the success and shortcomings of newspapers that have struggled with censorship laws in the Congo. There already some newspapers that are recognized in the draft, and it would be interesting to learn more about how each one has challenged censorship in the country. The source which was used in the creation of my peer's paragraph is credible and provides us with insight from a Congolese journalist, however, the article was written in 1986. Going forward, it may be useful to include a more recent source to give a more updated context on the developments of censorship in the Congo. Overall, I believe this is a strong and well-written draft, and I look forward to reading more as you update this page.

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